Saturday, April 9, 2011

Nice Work, If You Can Get It.


He waited just inside the back door, watching the club. It closed 15 minutes ago, won't be long now, he's sure. Pea coat, jeans. About 35 or so. Not a bad looking guy. Didn't stink when I walked by to get my chips.
Not drunk, but had just enough to make it seem like it could happen.
The front of the club was dead. He must not have known the place had a backdoor.
Closed 25 minutes ago.
I watch on the monitors, finishing my chips. Hope he didn't giver her money before hand.
She's putting the cash on her dresser. Not even laughing, just a day's work. Well, maybe he's imagining her laughing.
Closed 45 minutes ago.
He 12th time checks his phone and slowly walks back across the lobby to his room's hall. Four minutes later the phone rings. Young woman's voice.
“Sorry, I got a call from this number.”
“Oh, okay,” I hang up.
I sweep the crumbs onto the floor with my hand, hungry.
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18 comments:

  1. UnknownApril 9, 2011 at 3:22 PM

    ...and then?

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  2. Eric PApril 9, 2011 at 6:47 PM

    yeah, I'm also wondering what comes next!

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  3. TheStamosApril 9, 2011 at 7:40 PM

    want to see your next post soooon!

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  4. 123April 9, 2011 at 9:10 PM

    Cliff hanger? :(

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  5. FangApril 10, 2011 at 6:03 AM

    I expect some BUT WHO WAS PHONE reactions...

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  6. El OsvyApril 10, 2011 at 10:46 AM

    Nice post, I'm following you :)

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  7. AnonymousApril 10, 2011 at 1:53 PM

    I wonder who was that mysterious person in that phone call

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  8. InhiaApril 10, 2011 at 4:47 PM

    hi nice blog, following and supporting

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  9. KenzieApril 10, 2011 at 6:46 PM

    Awesome post man.

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  10. TunerollApril 10, 2011 at 7:38 PM

    Looking forward to the next post!

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  11. TasosApril 10, 2011 at 9:38 PM

    ooh man! that surely has a second part, right? where's the rest?

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  12. TaylorApril 10, 2011 at 10:41 PM

    ahhh whats next whats next!?!?!?!

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  13. Stef PelgrimsApril 11, 2011 at 1:43 AM

    awesommmeee

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  14. MeApril 11, 2011 at 4:27 AM

    but who was phone?

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  15. KitariApril 11, 2011 at 5:02 AM

    Deep :3 I presume theres a second part, or...?

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  16. JayApril 11, 2011 at 5:46 AM

    why'd you hang up?

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  17. SOMSApril 11, 2011 at 10:24 AM

    lol hung up fast

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  18. doomsdayApril 11, 2011 at 5:36 PM

    Keep posting great things, bro!

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