Tuesday, March 22, 2011

FreindZone Vigilante

For the fifth time he parks outside her house.  He'll do it.  This time he'll do it. 
He's gotta do something.  No one else will.  He's her friend, it's his duty, isn't it?
He plays it over again, how it'll go down.
Kick the door, punches, kicks, the speech.
She won't leave him, not yet, so he's got to stop. 
One thing at a time. 
One thing till she realizes what he's known for years, and comes.
It gets darker.  Checks his watch.  Shit. 
She'll be home soon.
Now.  Or never.
What if she gets home early?
Shit.  Probably shouldn't today.  Tomorrow.  Wait, work tomorrow.
He'll have to check her schedule.
For the fifth time he starts his car.
As he drives away he swears he sees a curtain move.
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21 comments:

  1. TriperMarch 22, 2011 at 12:44 PM

    Very interesting write. I would like to read more :)

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  2. AstyMarch 22, 2011 at 1:02 PM

    a short about the creeper 'best friend
    huh? do more do more

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  3. after3March 22, 2011 at 1:06 PM

    This Is deep.

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  4. Bryant AMarch 22, 2011 at 2:16 PM

    kinda creepy at the end

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  5. KontingencyMarch 22, 2011 at 2:39 PM

    MOAR

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  6. PatresMarch 22, 2011 at 3:38 PM

    Stalker zone hm :p

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  7. TasosMarch 22, 2011 at 5:32 PM

    so wait, this guy wants to talk to this girl about his feelings but he's having second thoughts. nice little story

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  8. ArexMarch 22, 2011 at 6:42 PM

    I hope this isnt you!!! If it is, I can lend some helpful suggestions! So many other girls out there, you'll find the right one and she'll know it ;).
    Ty for still checkin out my blog! I'll start reading everyone else's again.

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  9. Giles! MoxyMarch 23, 2011 at 10:21 AM

    I had someone like this a while back... they had good intentions but it just comes off creepy.. :S

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  10. TastyMarch 23, 2011 at 5:20 PM

    I lol'd. Nice rhythm.

    Feel bad for that guy though.

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  11. ArexMarch 24, 2011 at 3:20 AM

    You never told me if it was you who got friend zoned!

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  12. Phillip J FryMarch 24, 2011 at 3:57 AM

    Sounds a bit stalkerish but good read nonetheless

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  13. PicnasterMarch 24, 2011 at 4:14 AM

    Want to read more like this.
    Followed

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  14. ErikaMarch 24, 2011 at 4:15 AM

    This is all rather stalkerish. I love it =D

    Followed.

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  15. Danny MurphyMarch 24, 2011 at 4:21 AM

    I enjoyed that, good read

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  16. frameaj1March 24, 2011 at 4:28 AM

    cool poem. following for more of that please.

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  17. MeMarch 24, 2011 at 4:40 AM

    poor guy

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  18. DylanFMarch 24, 2011 at 5:30 AM

    Very nice. But in a sad way...

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  19. Steev MikeMarch 24, 2011 at 5:40 AM

    Sad :( should post more of this.

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  20. Stef PelgrimsMarch 24, 2011 at 8:36 AM

    good read! thx!

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  21. FlamebreakerMarch 26, 2011 at 11:24 AM

    This piece of text talks about all of us. About all of the times we doubt ourselves "Should we take action" Should we.. , and so on, Until we come to the conclusion it's to late for action and the moment is gone

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