Wednesday, April 27, 2011

Second Impressions

Dom the Entertainer stares at me from his business card.
That cocky smile, the popped collar and suit.
Confidence, Success.
Small town wedding singer.
Excuse me, Wedding Entertainer.
Pity or Hate?  I waffle.
Long term guest comes in.
A drunk, a philanderer.
Looks like the even eyed twin brother of Sloth.
More tales of his awesomeness,
of all the money he'll make.
He finally stumbles back to his room
chuckling dollar signs.
I break down and check Dom's website.
That grammar.
I settle on pity, wish his little dream luck.
The guest?
Maybe something will come up.

35 comments:

  1. i like your style. keep it up buddy

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  2. New blog design, or is it just me?

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  3. I love how you tell a story. It's somehow very personal like reading thoughts, without being like stream of consciousness writing.

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  4. awesome style of writing man

    short and sweet

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  5. Great style of writing! Love it!

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  6. Cool piece! Very eloquent depictions of the characters.

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  7. I cringed at popped collar and suit... who on earth would do that?

    Either way, good stuff man.

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  8. Extremely unique and flashy style, it's not just a poem, it's a story.

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  9. "that grammar" lol. that was the best line IMO.

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  10. He'll make it as a big time wedding entertainer

    mark my words!

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  11. interesting as usual. thanks man

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  12. I really like it, but:

    "That cocky smile, the popped collar and suit.
    Confidence, Success."

    I think the second line is kind of redundant in this case. But overall it's quite nice :)

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  13. Very well written. Looking forward to more.

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  14. This is really nice, good quality!

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  15. Excellent prose. Or poetry. Whichever.

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